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Post by shredmetal777 on Dec 16, 2005 23:28:37 GMT -5
Thanks!
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deadlock
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"Onward Christian soldiers moshing as to war!"
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Post by deadlock on Dec 17, 2005 12:16:05 GMT -5
ShredMetal, I like your writing! Especially the last one, "The Man I Used To Be". You have a genuine spirituality that shines through. Keep up the work, man!
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Post by shredmetal777 on Dec 17, 2005 14:07:05 GMT -5
Thanks for the encouragement and kind words,man!
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Post by shredmetal777 on Dec 18, 2005 20:12:27 GMT -5
I love it,great job,it's about Jesus' crucifixion, am I right?
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Post by John on Dec 18, 2005 20:30:12 GMT -5
That's great!
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Post by Solid on Dec 18, 2005 20:58:39 GMT -5
Yes, try to guess who I am talking to in the last two lines and try to guess what the name means (clue-it's in Latin).
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Post by shredmetal777 on Dec 18, 2005 21:00:53 GMT -5
You're telling satan Jesus will come back,as in the resurrection.
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Post by Solid on Dec 18, 2005 22:58:55 GMT -5
Yes, also anyone who doubts...anyone get the name yet?
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Post by John on Dec 19, 2005 22:19:21 GMT -5
Yes, also anyone who doubts...anyone get the name yet? I can't figure it out, who? Shredmetal, I like that one a lot. |
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Post by Solid on Dec 20, 2005 19:36:02 GMT -5
It means "unlikely"...oh, and Shreddy buddy, I'm guessing the song is about inner-turmoil.
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Post by crazywaffle on Dec 20, 2005 19:41:15 GMT -5
Yeah, i agree, but also how God can take it all away
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Post by shredmetal777 on Dec 20, 2005 20:18:14 GMT -5
Yeah,you're both right it's about inner turmoil,and how God has the power to take it all away.It's also about sinning and feeling convicted about it,and wishing you had never done it.
Did you like it? Do I need to change anything?
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Post by Solid on Dec 21, 2005 0:09:30 GMT -5
Oh, yes, I liked it.
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createsalvation
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What you are, I was. What I am, you will become.
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Post by createsalvation on Jan 6, 2006 1:00:30 GMT -5
This is a sonnet, the first one I ever wrote... It's called Elegy. (Yes, I know, over used but I picked it because it really fits the theme of the sonnet.)
The last time that I said goodbye to you
In red sky, I saw tears run down your face
Pain and then your torment so cold to you
Precisely that look that slows my pace
Banned from the thing I need to say now
Like I love you and our time was great fun
But I can't be hurt, pain I won't allow
Still I wish you could have been the one, one
To cure me of my undying sadness
To erase the scars I still haven't cured
Rid me of anger and violent madness
But instead your torture I endured
But despite all of the times we'd lie
I will love you until the day I die
That is so painful to me... *sigh*
Here's another one, I call it F.A.T. First song that I ever express God's love or my love for God in... I'm pretty sure these will be the lyrics I use for my band's next song.
Sometimes at night
I like to drag razors across my wrists
Pretend it's alright
Even the heroes
Die with the best in fabulous bloodshed
We're put to rest
We slame the knives into our chests
Make new scars like I'm alive
Dancing with the shadows
As graveyards settle to rest
The son He gave to cleanse our sins
Rises again
Cyanide tablet
A slow death to beat them all
Just like fabulous
Degradation sells
As another American dreams burns to the ground
Chastity sells but no one's buying
Pick the scars
His mercy is eternal
His word if lovely
His salvation for mankind
That he leaves up to you
Save yourself
Create your own salvation
Through fear and trembling
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Post by shredmetal777 on Jan 6, 2006 19:35:30 GMT -5
Great Job,Keep up the good work!
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