HELP

[notavailable]

I NEED SOME.

FOR THIS:

Now I know where we are
A filthy slum alley
Surrounded by dark figures
Grinning, snickering, drooling
I can already feel the pain
of 233 fists revenging
233 years of pain
By our hands
God is no longer with us
I wonder if he ever was
We're neither safe nor sorry

TWAS A GOOD CONCEPT BUT I FIND MYSELF GETTING NOWHERE WITH IT.

TAKE IT, TWIST IT, REDO IT, ADD TO IT, SOMETHING. HELP ME OUT SOMEBODY.

[conner]

Broken teeth, a shattered jaw
Ten to one, behold my God
Wicked sons of Heaven's loss
Raise your own inverted cross
Kings of earth, iron first
Serve the sacred you dismissed
Stand before your final day
Choke on every line you pray

Raise your glass to death
Not one second left

[Chorus:]
Wake the lifeless, die to fight this
Stand beside me, storm the gates of Hell
Wake the lifeless, die to fight this
Stand beside me, storm the gates of Hell
Storm the gates of Hell

Coward's heart, a serpent's tongue
Stand to face what you've outrun
Fear of death, fear of pain
Bound to all you took in vain
No more lies, no regrets
Sever ties and hollow debt
Open eyes, live to learn
Or watch your blessed temple burn

Raise your glass to death
Not one second left

[notavailable]

[conner]

D=

[Josh]

Now I know where we are
A filthy slum alley
Surrounded by dark figures
Grinning, snickering, drooling
I can already feel the pain
of 233 fists revenging
233 years of pain
By our hands
God is no longer with us
I wonder if he ever was
We're neither safe nor sorry
This is our bleak story.

I threw in the last line, cuz i thought it sounded nifty.

:l

[notavailable]

Jul 10, 2009 23:46:22 GMT -5 conner said:

D=

[Shiv]

22 years of pain
And I can feel it closing in
The will to rise above
Tearing my insides out

[alastairjohnjack]

I like Shiv's one, to the point and cuts out the rest of the descriptive junk.

[Fyacin]

Now I know where we are
A filthy slum alley
Surrounded by dark figures
Grinning, snickering, drooling
I can already feel the pain
of 233 fists revenging
233 years of pain
By our hands
God is no longer with us
I wonder if he ever was
We're neither safe nor sorry

Now I know thine pain
A pristine mirror
Twisting beneath the surface
Wishing, cursing, praying
Indecisive, reeling from escape
These 233 years of lies recalling
233 years of false convictions
God fears to be with us
Though we fled from Him
We're neither safe nor sorry.

Blah.

[notavailable]

Jul 11, 2009 8:45:28 GMT -5 Fyacin said:

Now I know where we are
A filthy slum alley
Surrounded by dark figures
Grinning, snickering, drooling
I can already feel the pain
of 233 fists revenging
233 years of pain
By our hands
God is no longer with us
I wonder if he ever was
We're neither safe nor sorry

Now I know thine pain
A pristine mirror
Twisting beneath the surface
Wishing, cursing, praying
Indecisive, reeling from escape
These 233 years of lies recalling
233 years of false convictions
God fears to be with us
Though we fled from Him
We're neither safe nor sorry.

Blah.

I LIKE IT.

[runny]

Pain-Made to order
Pain-Made to order
Pain-Made to order
Pain

Slippin', slappin', scattin' on my back
Tryin' to relax
Thinkin' about the facts of the cracks runnin'
Through the pack
Division of thought about the
War to be fought
For tryin' to mend the ranks
Still I get no thanks

They say they mean no disrespect
But dis is in effect
I take to heart the part
I play every day
Uniformed is one thing
Stupid is another
Keep runnin' your mouth but
Don't call me brother

But I'm tryin' to find someone
On my side
Cuz bangin' heads all the time starts to grind
At my gear and at my will
But persistent I am still so when
One insubordinate f**ker tries to test me

Blow to the head
An entrail rend
Guts on the floor
But you want more
Shows you the strength
Of the tenth rank
Pain's the only way to
Teach kids these days

Opened your eyes
You've realized
Talk back to me
Your punk-ass DIIIIEEES!

ONLY ONE OF US WALKS AWAY x4

I'm all you'll know
Where will you go
Valhalla's gone
With your soul

ONLY ONE OF US WALKS AWAY x2
ONLY ONE OF US WALKS AWAY (Walks the f**k away!)x2

[Jeremy]

i keep seeing this thread and thinking of the beatles song

[mountair]

God is no longer with us
I wonder if he ever was

Use sound-clips for those two lines, repeat over droning guitar lines for about 9-10 minutes. Maybe throw in some keyboards or other instruments near the middle for the "climax".

[Fyacin]

Jul 11, 2009 16:08:28 GMT -5 @notavailable said:

Jul 11, 2009 8:45:28 GMT -5 Fyacin said:

Now I know where we are
A filthy slum alley
Surrounded by dark figures
Grinning, snickering, drooling
I can already feel the pain
of 233 fists revenging
233 years of pain
By our hands
God is no longer with us
I wonder if he ever was
We're neither safe nor sorry

Now I know thine pain
A pristine mirror
Twisting beneath the surface
Wishing, cursing, praying
Indecisive, reeling from escape
These 233 years of lies recalling
233 years of false convictions
God fears to be with us
Though we fled from Him
We're neither safe nor sorry.

Blah.

I LIKE IT.

Why thank you. You write in such a different style then I do I didn't think it would mesh at all.

[notavailable]

Jul 11, 2009 17:08:48 GMT -5 @mountair said:

God is no longer with us
I wonder if he ever was

Use sound-clips for those two lines, repeat over droning guitar lines for about 9-10 minutes. Maybe throw in some keyboards or other instruments near the middle for the "climax".

I'LL PUT YOUR NAME IN THE LINER NOTES FOR THAT ONE.