Kate
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Post by Kate on Nov 12, 2009 21:42:36 GMT -5
I know I'm late to the game, but Alt+F4 should fix your poem.
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bleh
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Post by bleh on Nov 12, 2009 22:48:04 GMT -5
i aint stupid
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bleh
New Member
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Post by bleh on Nov 14, 2009 20:52:51 GMT -5
what about this one?
From start to finish I wonder why The cuts look good in this messed up lie The blood that trickles down my arm People all stare at the girl who self-harms:-
"The emo" they call me I turn to my name They act out slicing their wrists I hang my head in shame I can't help my feelings Of being alone I hide myself for the day Just longing to go home I sprawl on my bed With my razor in hand And take myself away To a much better land I stare in the mirror And let myself cry Looking forward to the day That I finally die
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Post by alastairjohnjack on Nov 14, 2009 21:37:21 GMT -5
Getting better.
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Post by Jacob on Nov 14, 2009 21:43:28 GMT -5
we have a middle school girl on our hands But anyway that wasn't nearly as bad as the first.
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Post by feverstone on Nov 14, 2009 22:21:39 GMT -5
You know how to rhyme. However, your meter isn't very constant. This is the amount of syllables in each stanza: 9, 9, 8, 10, 6, 5, 7, 6, 6, 5, 7, 6, 5, 6, 7, 6, 6, 5, 7, 6 You use 6, 5, 7 a bit... but it fizzles out towards the end.
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Post by Josh on Nov 14, 2009 23:24:05 GMT -5
He should slit his faggot throat and then his own.
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Post by feverstone on Nov 14, 2009 23:27:52 GMT -5
So... he has two throats? That's the most impressive thing I've seen in this thread so far.
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Post by Josh on Nov 14, 2009 23:31:57 GMT -5
No one wants to hear what you have to say.
So die in a fire.
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Post by feverstone on Nov 14, 2009 23:33:13 GMT -5
Again? Be more creative. Like... Blood-Eagle yourself.
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Post by Josh on Nov 14, 2009 23:34:54 GMT -5
Hey, I'm trying my best here.
Sheeesh.
And you could me more like Ithalyn you know.
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Post by feverstone on Nov 14, 2009 23:36:50 GMT -5
Being like Ithalyn calls for everyone else to be dicks for no reason. All I have to do is exist.
...but I'll try harder.
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Post by Josh on Nov 14, 2009 23:37:47 GMT -5
That's true.
But everyone else are dicks.
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Post by feverstone on Nov 14, 2009 23:38:27 GMT -5
They're worse than me.
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Post by Josh on Nov 14, 2009 23:40:26 GMT -5
Maybe,but you're just a poor excuse for a human being, and I will hate you because dix and bleach.
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