Post by Muffy on Mar 13, 2010 5:58:44 GMT -5
Ok, so Landon must be busy or something and therefore hasn't answered my PM about the vocals he wants for his CZAR songs. I'll post them here, I would like opinions, suggestions, and such.
This one I wrote while listening to the song, it was just whatever phrases came to me at the time. I think it could use some revision though, especially the last part.
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I
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A cold day without winter
A memory lost of an old place
Breath in deep
Breath
You have never been here before
The holes in the sky cry of new life
The grey forced out of existence
That disturbing light
Glowing path
Go on
But you strayed
Cannot form the thought
of turning around
Turn around
for it means giving up on yourself
you strayed from the glowing path
Cannot form the thought
of turning around
for it means giving up on yourself
Decisions have led you here
You thought the path was right
Now you are tortured
For sins
That you could never have committed
Blind in chaos you stumbled
Your decisions have led you here
But there never is a choice
With the nature of life
Responsibility
Is all your own now
Even if you do not understand
You've overstepped the boundaries
so many times
What are decisions
What are boundaries
What are choices
What is faith
What is reason
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I wrote this awhile ago, it fit perfectly in Landons second song.
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II
--
Blurry aqua green shimmers
A poison tailed diamond flutters close
Bluer it gets, and more cloudy
The deep opening wider
Difiguring the shining above
Bloated comets drift by
Like navigating dangerous asteroid fields
The deep seeker goes warily
Dark blue
now the atmosphere is heavy
Eyes peer from strewn pillars of rock
Some bright, others black
Black like the abyss opening below
Here the stars never fluctuate
Ferocious planets of the dark roam
Where life is sparse, in dead tranquility
Opening now
The darkness covers all
Pouring now
The grim tide rushes in
The diver
The diver
The diver is asleep
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I didn't do anything for III.
This one I wrote while listening to the song, it was just whatever phrases came to me at the time. I think it could use some revision though, especially the last part.
-
I
-
A cold day without winter
A memory lost of an old place
Breath in deep
Breath
You have never been here before
The holes in the sky cry of new life
The grey forced out of existence
That disturbing light
Glowing path
Go on
But you strayed
Cannot form the thought
of turning around
Turn around
for it means giving up on yourself
you strayed from the glowing path
Cannot form the thought
of turning around
for it means giving up on yourself
Decisions have led you here
You thought the path was right
Now you are tortured
For sins
That you could never have committed
Blind in chaos you stumbled
Your decisions have led you here
But there never is a choice
With the nature of life
Responsibility
Is all your own now
Even if you do not understand
You've overstepped the boundaries
so many times
What are decisions
What are boundaries
What are choices
What is faith
What is reason
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I wrote this awhile ago, it fit perfectly in Landons second song.
--
II
--
Blurry aqua green shimmers
A poison tailed diamond flutters close
Bluer it gets, and more cloudy
The deep opening wider
Difiguring the shining above
Bloated comets drift by
Like navigating dangerous asteroid fields
The deep seeker goes warily
Dark blue
now the atmosphere is heavy
Eyes peer from strewn pillars of rock
Some bright, others black
Black like the abyss opening below
Here the stars never fluctuate
Ferocious planets of the dark roam
Where life is sparse, in dead tranquility
Opening now
The darkness covers all
Pouring now
The grim tide rushes in
The diver
The diver
The diver is asleep
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I didn't do anything for III.
