This is a song I am writing.What do you all think?

[Always the Hunter]

This is something that happend to me. One of my life experiences. I had to do some thing to get it of my mind so I wrote this. It is not done and I don't know if it ever will be but this is the draft that I have. Let me know what you all think negative or positive comments. Please give feed back.

Memories

Memories will they never fade,
I still remember just like it was yesterday,
You standing there in the sun light,
So beautiful,
Your kind face and eyes so inviting,
I can still see the reflection of my smile in your eyes,
These are the thoughts that plague my mind,
Memories of your smile still haunt my sleep,
I can still hear you say I love you,
So gentle,
Your voice sometimes so clear,
Will these thoughts of you never fade,
Now what have we become,
Just enemies,

O God take these shattered dreams,
And this broken heart,
Heals these wounds,
Bless me with a fresh start,
God I give my life to you,
Take what has become of us,
These shattered pieces of lives and our broken hearts,

[Solid]

Very emotional, and I like it. Makes me remember not to take things for granted.

[Laura]

I love that....makes me envy you haha I can't write poetry or anything like that. But this is really really good, do you have anything else you've written?

[Always the Hunter]

solidstate234 said:

Very emotional, and I like it. Makes me remember not to take things for granted.

Hey thanks and yeah don't take things for granted exspecaly some one you love. Because very often you don't and won't realize how much you love or will miss that person until they are gone. I know from experiance. I took her and her love for granted. Thanks again.

[Always the Hunter]

laura said:

I love that....makes me envy you haha I can't write poetry or anything like that. But this is really really good, do you have anything else you've written?

Yes, I have written other things but never nothing like this. Because what I have above well parts at least have been floating around in my mind scince she broke up with me, witch was 4 months ago. I finaly put the parts together to form this. I found it helped to get my feelings on paper and give them to God. Thank you for your complement! And hey I liked that one thing you wrote about being damaged and how your heart can be heald. That was realy good and it helped me.

I believe it is just important to share things that God has helped you to write or laid on your heart. To encourage some one who has been or might be going through the same things. It is cool to let people know that their is always hope in God.
Thanks again

[Laura]

I'm glad to know that things I think about (and put on paper) help people. I prayed about that.


The heart can always be healed.

I loved what you wrote...it was awesome, blows my rambling outta the water

[JohnnyMetal]

Once I saw Memories, I started singing that song from Cats........


Very cool though!