foreverlost
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I'm forever lost to you... to him and even to my saviour.
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Post by foreverlost on Mar 11, 2007 21:48:54 GMT -5
Yeaa...so basically the title explains it...its a new poem that I just wrote. I know its not that amazing but I was just venting what I've been feeling and going through lately
Words and Glares
Glares that stab Words that sting Knives that cut Wrists that bleed Feelings that hurt Mind full of insanity Needing to run away But no where to run… Your words cut me like knives Your glare could tear me down in an instant I hate fighting with you But you’re so angry You know it’s not my fault But you still vent your anger I hate you for it But I can’t help but love you Glares that stab Words that sting I don’t need a knife to give me pain Only words and glares…
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Post by Kerrick on Mar 11, 2007 23:54:46 GMT -5
Dang. That's a powerful poem. It's pure, uncensored emotion. I like that. I think that is something that is lacking in a lot of modern poetry.
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foreverlost
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Post by foreverlost on Mar 12, 2007 9:30:53 GMT -5
Thanks! I was really in the writing mood last night and well yea...it just came out!
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Post by metahead on Mar 12, 2007 10:20:04 GMT -5
wrists that bleed?? emo?
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foreverlost
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Post by foreverlost on Mar 12, 2007 12:16:21 GMT -5
1. I am not emo the whole slitting my wrists in my poem would be called symbolism (I do not slit my wrists) 2. What do you consider emo? The origin of emo isn't someone that wears dark clothes is depressed and slits their wrists. Most people today don't know what emo is. 3. Emo is just another sterio-type and what makes it any worse then hardcore, prep, goth or jock?? (hope you get my drift) Soo what if my poems a bit dark and depressive. Not everyone lives perfect lives and my poetry and symbolism is the way I express myself btw I'm not mad at you, metahead for experessesing what you thought of it. Because I asked for critisism just trying to set you straight about MY part in the poem. Thats all.
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Post by Atheo on Mar 12, 2007 17:18:04 GMT -5
I find emos far less annoying than I do preps. I find many preps to be shallow, vacuous people only concerned with who is dating who and including like into a sentence 5 words long three times. No joke- I've heard it.
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Post by Atheo on Mar 12, 2007 17:18:27 GMT -5
Nice poem though- very emotional.
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foreverlost
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Post by foreverlost on Mar 12, 2007 20:19:48 GMT -5
I find emos far less annoying than I do preps. I find many preps to be shallow, vacuous people only concerned with who is dating who and including like into a sentence 5 words long three times. No joke- I've heard it. Thanks for backing me up in this!! and thanks for saying my peom was nice
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Post by Atheo on Mar 12, 2007 21:45:30 GMT -5
No problem.
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Post by Solid on Mar 13, 2007 0:44:38 GMT -5
I like it. It does portray what you were feeling at the moment you were writing it.
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Post by Ferd Berfel on Mar 13, 2007 18:35:21 GMT -5
I like it, it's really good. You really brought the emotion through And I'm with Atheo, Preps are a hell of a lot more annoying than emos. Although it's fun to mock them because they don't know you're talking about them
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Post by Darkone on Mar 13, 2007 18:37:54 GMT -5
Wow that was a really powerful poem....(well at least in the way I understood it) Keep up the amazing writing ohhhh and I agree with all the people about the prep thing....they annoy the heack outa me!!!! Plus I like the emo style....so I don't really have anything against them.
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Post by Atheo on Mar 13, 2007 23:18:36 GMT -5
I don't much like the hair that many emos wear, but hey- many people don't like MY hair.
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Post by Darkone on Mar 14, 2007 8:07:30 GMT -5
I don't mind the emo hairstyle....its not ThAT bad. but *shrugs* everyone has different oppinions. I was talking more about their clothing style.
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Post by CheesecakeChamp on Mar 14, 2007 8:08:03 GMT -5
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