Post by Fyacin on May 11, 2009 23:34:56 GMT -5
Wrote this mostly today, thought I'd look for some opinions on it while the muse is still fresh. I don't usually write in this style, I dislike repeating words alot, and prefer trying to make it more structured, but I kind of like the rythm to this one.
There’s a hole, Whoa. Just so you, know.
It’s in my heart.
Empty, hide me,
Oh, can you save me?
There’s a hole, oh, just so you know.
It’s in this soul
Oh, do I hate me?
Decay, why does it stay, I was free
I thought I was me.
I didn’t think I needed this?
Oh, why do I sing, it’s not real, it’s not real, I’m just…
It must not be real.
I’m just…
There’s a hole, Oh, just, so you, know.
It’s in my soul.
Oh, why do I sing? It’s not real, I’ll not break again, and it’s not real I’m just…
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, please wake me.
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, Do I hate me?
Oh, why do I sing? It’s crazy, no please don’t wake me.
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, please wake me.
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, Do you forgive me?
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, please wake me.
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, Can you help me?
I’d rather not wake up.
I’d rather stay crazy.
I’d rather sing then be empty
I’d rather pray then be empty
I’d rather wait for safety
I’d rather stay crazy and feel it.
It’s not real, but I still need it.
I’m not crazy, but I’ll keep it.
I think I will.
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, Can you forgive me?
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, please don’t leave me.
I’d rather not wake up.
I’d rather not fake it.
It’s a part of me
So I’m not empty.
Oh, there’s a hole in me but,
It’s all right; I’m just a little crazy.
It’s all here, just a little shaky.
Don’t worry, I’ll figure it out.
I’m all here, just a little shaky.
I’m all right, just a little crazy.
Don’t worry, we’ll figure it out.
You’re still here, but I’m a little shaky.
I’m all right, heh; you must be a little crazy.
*Edit
Instead of cluttering up the Art section I'm just going to post in this thread whenever I get the urge to do so, and put a link in my sig.
There’s a hole, Whoa. Just so you, know.
It’s in my heart.
Empty, hide me,
Oh, can you save me?
There’s a hole, oh, just so you know.
It’s in this soul
Oh, do I hate me?
Decay, why does it stay, I was free
I thought I was me.
I didn’t think I needed this?
Oh, why do I sing, it’s not real, it’s not real, I’m just…
It must not be real.
I’m just…
There’s a hole, Oh, just, so you, know.
It’s in my soul.
Oh, why do I sing? It’s not real, I’ll not break again, and it’s not real I’m just…
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, please wake me.
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, Do I hate me?
Oh, why do I sing? It’s crazy, no please don’t wake me.
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, please wake me.
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, Do you forgive me?
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, please wake me.
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, Can you help me?
I’d rather not wake up.
I’d rather stay crazy.
I’d rather sing then be empty
I’d rather pray then be empty
I’d rather wait for safety
I’d rather stay crazy and feel it.
It’s not real, but I still need it.
I’m not crazy, but I’ll keep it.
I think I will.
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, Can you forgive me?
Crazy, not crazy, please save me, please don’t leave me.
I’d rather not wake up.
I’d rather not fake it.
It’s a part of me
So I’m not empty.
Oh, there’s a hole in me but,
It’s all right; I’m just a little crazy.
It’s all here, just a little shaky.
Don’t worry, I’ll figure it out.
I’m all here, just a little shaky.
I’m all right, just a little crazy.
Don’t worry, we’ll figure it out.
You’re still here, but I’m a little shaky.
I’m all right, heh; you must be a little crazy.
*Edit
Instead of cluttering up the Art section I'm just going to post in this thread whenever I get the urge to do so, and put a link in my sig.