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Post by frostlikeashes_1 on Jun 18, 2009 23:56:32 GMT -5
Here is another one, short but sweet: Lo, the tree stands on yonder hill And the bird utters a lonesome trill Will the sun rise on the morn To burn away the fogs of scorn? The seas rage against the cliff Waves punctuate futile riffs Roots do not hear the sea’s song The path hath stood e’erlong. simple, yet endearing. definitely a mood setter and tells pretty much an entire story!
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Post by frostlikeashes_1 on Jun 18, 2009 23:58:05 GMT -5
Your writings are swell.
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Post by Fyacin on Jun 20, 2009 11:46:56 GMT -5
Thankyou And, I have another peice of the "Wind" concept I am working on. This one is a little before the last lengthy one, and is a bit sappy. Your face in my dream again All my mistakes in the light A blessed paradigm Given to fight the night Shadow in my eyes again Silence decry my plight Your love buys me time Slowly restoring my sight You are, a rose without thorns You are, a rainbow in my storm You are, wind for my wings You are, my muse that sings Oh Dove dance with me again I feel safe when I am with you Your voice a glorious paean As I lift mine in tribute Your hope my only bastion My heart you did renew And every word spoken Reveals a new virtue You are, spring for my winter You are, my heart’s deadly hunter You are, a cure to my poison Oh you, save me from oblivion
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Post by Josh on Jun 20, 2009 16:54:27 GMT -5
Very nice, I right some sappy stuff as well.
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Post by Fyacin on Jun 21, 2009 9:37:13 GMT -5
Thinking of addding this:
I can't feel your pulse with my fingers Telling me that I'm alive within As I drift away in my prison Never see the light of day again I hear your whisper in my ear then "Oh my love don't you go now Please, I cannot bear to see you so" Then only thing that entered my vision Was the light of your eyes Oh This dark I tried to hide Begins to overtake them Now your mouth moves but I can't hear. I think I'm lost but then I see You cry single a tear Desperately I try to wake up As your pathos calls to mine
as a bridge in between "cure to my poision) and "Save me from oblivion" Couple with a tempo change and a bit of minor-y magic it sounds really nice.
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Post by Fyacin on Jul 22, 2009 16:39:18 GMT -5
I haunt cold streets To wear a cloak of solitude The others walk beside me Their breath lingers in the air While mine own freezes before me
Snow falls forever To deaden songs of fate Each still unique to me The others have sung them before Their attention declares each unworthy
I am in the machine To the end I linger Gelid chills consume me The others may have died Their hearts now are empty
Steam descends unto fog To wreath a hundred towers Their ingenuity does not impress me The others marvel in the structures Their art a lattice of venality
I can’t abide it here To live is to repeat The ceaseless cycle passes over me The others sustain their perfect clock Their joy to attend to the rhythm blindly
Heartbeats echo with gears To breathe in is to breathe out Every gasp dilutes me The others drown in apathy Their duty to bestow it willingly
And I revamped my last one:
Your face in my dream again All my mistakes in the light A blessed paradigm Given to fight the night Shadow in my eyes again Silence decry my plight Your love buys me time Slowly restoring my sight
You are, a rose without thorns You are, a rainbow in my storm You dance, Among the stars You weave, a spell for my heart You are, wind for my wings You are, my muse that sings You are, spring for my winter You are, my heart’s deadly hunter
Oh Dove dance with me again I feel safe when I am with you Your voice a glorious paean As I lift mine in tribute Your hope my only bastion My strength you did renew And every word spoken Reveals a new virtue
I am, a broken reflection In your, eyes I am real Can you, promise to stay If I, ever lose my way? I am, a flickering shadow A touch, now I can feel A kiss, awakens my empathy A breath, you capture all of me Can you promise to stay? If I.... I can't feel your pulse with my fingers Telling me that I’m fading again As I drift away in my prison Never see the light of day within I hear your whisper in my ear then "Oh my love don't you go now Please, I cannot bear to see you so" Then only thing left in my vision Was the light of your eyes Oh this violence I tried to hide Begins to overtake them Now your mouth moves but I can't hear. I think I'm lost but then I see You cry single a tear I now realize what I fear My myriad sins once held dear? No, a perverse future left unclear
(You, held me close Everything was numb The words came slow Drifting through the haze You made the oath You said you would You said you would)
Desperately I try to wake up As your pathos calls to mine
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